recrafted writing

Recrafted:

While I was floating to the bottom I saw dolphins,fish,sharks and a whole bunch of other underwater animals.Suddenly I quickly fell and landed in a little cave the water had disappeared. In the corner of my eye I saw it………THE MAGICAL AMULET(>_<).

As I was walking towards the amulet suddenly obstacles started appearing throughout the cave.

First I had to jump over incredibly high walls.I made it to the next obstacle.I had to go across the waters ruled by the king of the waters…………....SHARKS.Thankfully I had to swing on vines.”YES”I made it across now onto the third obstacles.I have to dodge balls of raspberry jelly to make it to the last obstacle but instead of dodging them I decided to try get it in my mouth.I’m so close now I only have to complete this lazer maze.

Thats it, its just an inch away from my hand so I slowly reached out and grabbed it.Suddenly the cave started crumbling down on me.I had to run to the start as quick as I could but that meant I had to go through the obstacles again.I made it out just in time.I took the amulet home and the magic started working.ZOOM I was in a parallel universe.

Original:

While I was diving to the bottom I saw dolphins,fish,sharks and a whole bunch of other animals.Suddenly I quickly fell and landed in a little cave there was no water any more.

In the corner of my eye I saw it……….THE MAGICAL AMULET(>_<).

As I was walking towards the amulet suddenly obstacles started appearing everywhere.

First I had to jump over really high walls.I made to the next obstacle.I have to swing across the waters ruled by the sharks on some vines.”YES”I made it across now onto the third obstacles.I have to dodge balls of jelly to make it to the last obstacle but instead of dodging it I decided to try get it in my mouth.I’m so close now I only have to complete this lazer maze.

Thats it, its just an inch away from my hand so I slowly reached out and grabbed it.Suddenly the cave started crumbling down on me.I had to run to the start as quick as I could but that meant I had to go through the obstacles again.I made it out just in time.I took the amulet home and the magic started working.ZOOM I was in another world.